Friday, August 13, 2010

Those Eyes – In Haiku

They draw me closer
Longing and lusting for you
I desire those eyes

Sparkling and shining
The way galaxies collide
Mesmerizing me

Look at me again
Until twilight I could stare
I get lost in them

Bright and beautiful
Blue, green, grey, brown, yellow too
Those eyes magnetize

Away I can’t look
They grab me and pull me in
Surging with passion

_
posted 12:03 PM
labels: , ,

16 comments:

  1. WeaselAugust 13, 2010 at 1:14 PM

    Excellent haiku! Great response to the prompt!

    -Weasel

    ReplyDelete
  2. MaryAugust 13, 2010 at 3:53 PM

    So may well done Haiku in response to the prompt! Nice to have the opportunity to read your work.

    ReplyDelete
  3. JRMAugust 13, 2010 at 3:56 PM

    Thank you! I chose to do 5 instead of 1 because 1 cannot possibly fully express my thought, and 5 is just enough to make me stretch and explore. I did 5 for my other haiku post today as well for the same reason. I think 5 it a good amount to allow for full expression of a thought.

    ReplyDelete
  4. brenda wAugust 13, 2010 at 4:20 PM

    It's wonderful to be so mesmerized. Well crafted piece.
    ~Brenda

    ReplyDelete
  5. Diane TAugust 13, 2010 at 4:33 PM

    Seconding what Brenda says. Well written....

    ReplyDelete
  6. AnonymousAugust 13, 2010 at 4:58 PM

    Wonderful set of haikus..and I love your comment that five can make you stretch and grow, so important! Looking forward to reading your other set, now...

    ReplyDelete
  7. Carrie Van HornAugust 14, 2010 at 1:47 PM

    Your poem of haikus are mesmerizing! Wonderful for the prompt! :-)

    ReplyDelete
  8. Everyday GoddessAugust 14, 2010 at 2:53 PM

    I gave you one of my weekly Goddess Awards for this glorious piece. Come by to collect it anytime you want, if you want.

    Well done!

    ReplyDelete
  9. UnknownAugust 14, 2010 at 9:23 PM

    Wow! I love haikus! That was outstanding!

    ReplyDelete
  10. UnknownAugust 15, 2010 at 5:58 AM

    I came via Everyday Goddess. Well deserved award!

    ReplyDelete
  11. UnknownAugust 15, 2010 at 8:39 AM

    Absolutely beautiful!

    ReplyDelete
  12. JRMAugust 16, 2010 at 9:59 AM

    Thank you, all! It was a pleasure putting this together!

    ReplyDelete
  13. AnonymousAugust 17, 2010 at 6:11 AM

    great write!

    ReplyDelete
  14. Eileen T O'Neill .....August 17, 2010 at 10:34 AM

    JRM,
    An emotionally,packed read.
    The eyes were central to your words.
    Best wishes
    Eileen

    ReplyDelete
  15. rchAugust 18, 2010 at 9:30 AM

    Hi JRM, this is awesome, the haikus flow together seamlessly into a really great poem.

    ReplyDelete
  16. BubbaSeptember 1, 2010 at 11:58 AM

    Clever, blending haiku into something more. Nice job, JRM!

    ReplyDelete

Subscribe to: Post Comments (Atom)